an untitled poem about storm
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an untitled poem about storm
Silence isn't silent
It's like calm before the storm
Soon the clouds will be violent
Raindrops will form
Pouring down her face
With thunder in her head
No more empty space
I need the weather to be clear, she said
I'd love to recieve feedback since I only just started writing poems! -mari
It's like calm before the storm
Soon the clouds will be violent
Raindrops will form
Pouring down her face
With thunder in her head
No more empty space
I need the weather to be clear, she said
I'd love to recieve feedback since I only just started writing poems! -mari
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an untitled poem about storm :: Comments
Sun Nov 19, 2017 8:10 pm by Amelia Jane
Hey Mari, moved your topic to the blog section so feedback stays focused.
I really like the apparent play on words in the last line (I need the weather to be clear). Was that intentional?
I really like the apparent play on words in the last line (I need the weather to be clear). Was that intentional?
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