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an untitled poem about storm




Silence isn't silent
It's like calm before the storm
Soon the clouds will be violent
Raindrops will form

Pouring down her face
With thunder in her head
No more empty space
I need the weather to be clear, she said


I'd love to recieve feedback since I only just started writing poems! -mari

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Post on Sun Nov 19, 2017 8:10 pm by Amelia Jane

Hey Mari, moved your topic to the blog section so feedback stays focused.

I really like the apparent play on words in the last line (I need the weather to be clear). Was that intentional?

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